I wrote an English Paper on DDR

esotericlete · Trick Member Joined: 22 Aug 2002

Actually, Sumchic, what grade are you in?

kablooie13 · Trick Member Joined: 10 Jan 2004 Location: Hamden, CT

You just took DDR 10x more seriously than anyone should allow.

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Xen Soulstealer · Trick Member Joined: 22 Jun 2004

*Waits for teacher to say ' OMG HE SUXORZ I DO 10 FEET!! AAA!" * Sorry.. that'd be funny.. To me

Solid Snakke · Posted: Mon Sep 13, 2004 4:12 pm Post subject:

That was great, sumchic. You should be new PR who runs those Nike ads. So much... Olympicness.

Hehe, glad you got a high score.

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SetsunaKira7 · Posted: Tue Sep 14, 2004 2:27 pm Post subject:

This paper has taught us a valuable lesson that I believe we should all learn and love:

In the end, everyone hugs.

sorry, I just had to

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Illusion Bomb · Posted: Tue Sep 14, 2004 2:30 pm Post subject:

It taught me a lesson too. It taught me that someone needs to take action about the English classes in public schools in Akron, Ohio. Gosh I think I just got dumber reading that.

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AuntieM · Posted: Wed Sep 15, 2004 1:58 pm Post subject:

Sumchic, as a fellow writer I have to say that I think that is a great piece. You have a real talent for conveying emotion through your detailed description of setting. Your use of sentence fragments sped the action along, helping us to feel the tension in the room you were describing. I also like how you refuse to focus on the players specifically, even describing their reactions as "Mouths are fully opened in awe. Eyes are frozen open" as if the players cease to exist as people, and exist solely as players of The Game.

There are a couple of instances when you could work on your s-v agreement or s-pronoun agreement. Also, you step out of your use of third person plural when you say We; I would change that.

In any case, I think it's great. Don't pay any attention to the haters. I can understand why you got such a good grade. Thanks for sharing that piece with your fellow freaks.

Keep writing.
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psycho_ddr_chick_828 · Basic Member Joined: 12 Sep 2004

[quote="rsvl_rookie"]nice paper, the thing I like about your paper is that I totally understand what you are writing about, but what sucks is that your teacher who read this paper probably had a tough time understanding the ddr experience since your teacher has probably never played the game before...[/quote][/img]

I agree it as a good paper, and to us ddr freaks it was totaly understandable, if your teacher gives you a bad grade cuse he/ she didnt understand it you should make him/ her play the game some day

Daniel · Trick Member Joined: 29 Aug 2002 Location: Sonoma, CA

This paper looks like a compilation of what is written in many magazine/newspaper articles about DDR when the writer opens up the topic at the beginning of the article.

In order to improve your article, try to convince me that you are not totally new to DDR or are just observing it. Write something where I can trully enter the mind of an aspiring player who wants to conquer the most difficult challenges of DDR.

Rancidfish · Posted: Fri Sep 17, 2004 1:20 am Post subject:

I wrote a paper on DDR to satisfy my writing composition requirement in college, and it was totally cooler than this paper.

However, since it was a test-type thing and I hand-wrote it, I don't have the paper anymore.

But I still easily got a passing grade on it. That was cool.

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sumchic · Basic Member Joined: 09 Sep 2004 Location: Akron, ohio

Thank you everyone who has given me compliments on my paper. And thank you, also, to those who critisized, even if it wasn't in a not so nice manner. I jsut wish you would be more opened minded and not think of this as a formal essay. Because that is NOT what it is. It's a creative writing. My english teacher is a great and wonderful person. And I think she has taught me alot through this school year. BTW i'm in AP Englsih 11. I am 16 so i know my writing is not perfect.

KEF1 · Posted: Sun Sep 19, 2004 3:31 pm Post subject:

Pantera · Posted: Sun Sep 19, 2004 4:14 pm Post subject:

I don't have to take english for the rest of my life! Whee!

/me does the I-don't-have-to-take-english-for-the-rest-of-my-life dance!

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MoMoisyummy · Posted: Sun Sep 19, 2004 4:33 pm Post subject:

Good Discriptive Words! but, I wonder what grade did you get?
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