I wrote an English Paper on DDR

[sumchic]

[color=red]The Game: The One and Only
Heart-rate rising. Layers of clothing being stripped off of the body. Tightening of a belt buckle. Pulling hair up, off of neck. Pant legs pulled high above the knees. Match the color coded wires to the VCR. Unfold the nine-squared mats. A smell of plastic and rubber floats into the noses of the group. Ahh…the smell of the mats brings a smile to their faces. Turn on the game. Grab ahold of foot, pull behind. STRETCH! Ahh… Next foot. STRETCH! Ahh… Now we’re ready. All of this in preparation for The Game. The One. The Only. DDR. Dance Dance Revolution.
Friends, unsure of what is to come, turn into enemies. We compete for the prize. The ultimate prize. The prize of winning. Along with winning comes bragging rights. Just icing on the cake. Two enemies step up to the mats. The mats are smooth, which make it easier to slide feet across. It’s cold to touch, though we could not feel it through our socks. TAP, TAP, TAP! Player one starts tapping their foot to set up the game. Player two stands in place, patiently waiting. The energetic music starts up, signaling the beginning of the game.
A foot swipes across the mat to select the music for the round. Chsk…Chsk… Chsk… The music selection rounds the screen like the big “The Price is Right” wheel. Occasionally it stops and we hear a snippet of lively music. The song is finally picked. The players ready themselves. They spread their legs to the left and right arrows. Pictures engulf the screen. They are bright-colored and would keep a small child mesmerized for hours. They move rapidly around the screen, distracting the players if they aren’t concentrating hard enough on the task at hand. The music starts playing. Seems easy enough, at first. The players start bouncing their bodies to the beat they feel. Arrows direct the player’s feet on the mat. They are colorful and constantly flashing to keep the player’s attention. Their feet start moving across the mat making a swiping sound as they move. The steps are easy at first. Up… Down… Jump… Left… Right… Down. “This is to easy…It must be tricking us,” the players say. Suddenly the arrows start moving quicker and quicker. Jump… Down.. Down.. Left.. Left. Right. LeftRightDownDownUpJumpUpRightUpDown. “Oh, my God! It’s getting quick!” The feet are now going at a constant speed. Though the speed is difficult the two players keep up. “Perfects” and “Greats” flash across the screen giving the players confidence. The pitter patter on the mat sends vibrations through the floor. The vibrations can be heard throughout the house. With every jump the china in the cabinet bounces around.
The Song finally comes to an end and the score appears on the screen. “I triple A’ed it? I can’t believe it!” A spell of pure amazement is cast onto the group of friends watching the players. Murmurs move across the room. People are in shock. Mouths are fully opened in awe. Eyes are frozen open. The group is trying to comprehend what they just witnessed. Everybody is snapped back to reality and watches as the next song comes on. All hope for another great performance.
“I think I’ll try something more difficult. I’ll do a nine-footer.” Whispers fly across the room again. The audience shakes their heads in disapproval. They don’t believe the player can do it. The music song is selected and the music starts up again. This time there is no trickery. The fast paced arrows start at the very beginning. The player’s feet hurry across the mat. Their lower body is moving so fast that their upper body is stationary. They appear to be doing a version of River Dancing. The sounds start to magnify. The beat is moving faster and faster. This time they are not getting “Perfects” and “Greats”, but instead they receive “Boos” Pain fills the player’s faces. Sweat begins to drip off of their red faces. All of a sudden the song stops. They somehow passed. The players collapse onto the mat. Gasping for air, “It feels… as if…my legs…are going to fall off.” The group applauds the two players.
The players may have danced their way through the tough song, but the real test was if they won. Every one sits in silence for the results. All that can be heard is the heartbeat within your own body. Each player’s lips move quickly as they mutter a silent prayer. The screen flashes the scores. Everybody struggles to see the brightly colored scores. “Ahahaha…I won. I won! I can’t believe it!” The two players embrace in the excitement. They don’t even think of the awful amounts of sweat and stench that’s coming off each others bodies. They know the struggles each went through to play the game and they congratulate each other.
Then the taunting begins. The winner starts bouncing around on his spaghetti legs. All the pain subsided with the victory. “I beat you! Ha! I’m the best!” The two players crumble onto the nearby sofa. Each content with their own victory. Two more friends turned enemies step up to the mat. All for the love of The Game. The One. The Only. DDR. Dance Dance Revolution.[/color]

[Caleb Brightmore]

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[Flameboat]

Not bad, although your English Teacher might have trouble understanding what they're doing if he isn't familiar with the game.
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[Caleb Brightmore]

[Illusion Bomb]

[sumchic]

Yes, i know the paper is corny. I thought so too. But the assignment was an observation report. Meaning i had to use all my senses while obserbing sumthing.

[n2oxide]

That subject title "I wrote and English Paper ond DDR" had me worried... I mean, lyke WTF?!one!?/lol. Any topic about english papers with that bad spelling should scare you.

[sumchic]

LoL. Thx for pointing that out. it's not that i'm a horrble speller. it's more that i'm a horrible typer. My mind works faster than my fingers and sumtimes i get letters mixed up or added in. Oh well.

[Pantera]

No offense meant to you, but if your English teacher gives that a passing grade, he or she should have his or her teaching liscense revoked.
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[Thomas Hobbes]

Yes, I can see plenty of sentence fragments.
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[AdviceGopher]

you fail

[sumchic]

I don't think everyone understands....Think of it like a free write. Kinda like a poem. I know a lot of the sentences are fragments and aren't finished. It's kinda an informal paper...I'll post wut my grade is as soon as i get it back...

[DrumUltimA]

[Caleb Brightmore]

[916 Roseville SUCKS]

nice paper, the thing I like about your paper is that I totally understand what you are writing about, but what sucks is that your teacher who read this paper probably had a tough time understanding the ddr experience since your teacher has probably never played the game before...
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[Kevlars7]

Wow, enemies, eh? Heh. It was an interesting read. Some parts were kinda cheezy, but I feel where you're coming from. It would've been interesting to hear about one from the arcade, all kinds of crazy things would've been going on, toying with you're spidey-senses.

Nice job though. Make sure you always have someone proofread your writing, they can find all kinds of errors that you would've left out.
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I'll try to think of something good soon...

[DJX]

[sumchic]

Guess what kiddies?! I got a 28 outta 30 on my paper. I knew this was a good paper. The only points I got taken off was one for sigular/plural agreement. And the begining was a little bit rough. And yeah, i did have people check it over. But i litterally had one night to do a rough draft and a finaly copy. I got my mother, who is excellent in english, to help me. Also it was our second essay we did the whole week. So I dunno about the rest of you...but don't you think that's asking ALOT for a PERFECT paper? I know there are mistakes. Yes, grammer, amybe sum spelling. But isn't every, i mean every paper always a working piece of art? Well, that's what i've always been taught.

[Pantera]